Comments for Old Tomb http://yangguo.wordpress.com finding the true meaning of life Wed, 06 Aug 2008 09:10:58 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 Comment on Dialogue by theredpants http://yangguo.wordpress.com/dialogue-exercise/#comment-92 theredpants Wed, 06 Aug 2008 09:10:58 +0000 http://yangguo.wordpress.com/dialogue-exercise/#comment-92 The dialogue is good and realistic and the tension mounts and is sustained quite nicely but it ends off rather suddenly - not what I was expecting. The dialogue is good and realistic and the tension mounts and is sustained quite nicely but it ends off rather suddenly – not what I was expecting.

]]> Comment on Letter to the Past by theredpants http://yangguo.wordpress.com/letter-to-the-past/#comment-91 theredpants Wed, 06 Aug 2008 09:07:08 +0000 http://yangguo.wordpress.com/?page_id=20#comment-91 Good emotional letter. But just remember, as I've said time and again, anger is a good emotion to have in storytelling but it's also a dangerous one. If you can control it, it'll give you bountiful stories. If you can't control it, you'll have stories that have little meaning other than to be an outlet for ranting. Good emotional letter. But just remember, as I’ve said time and again, anger is a good emotion to have in storytelling but it’s also a dangerous one. If you can control it, it’ll give you bountiful stories. If you can’t control it, you’ll have stories that have little meaning other than to be an outlet for ranting.

]]> Comment on Visual Trigger by theredpants http://yangguo.wordpress.com/visual-trigger/#comment-90 theredpants Wed, 06 Aug 2008 09:03:37 +0000 http://yangguo.wordpress.com/?page_id=19#comment-90 A good attempt at the greek tragedy convention. Edwin is quite close to being a classical greek tragedy protagonist (arrogant, unknowing of his own arrogance, etc.) Only thing is the story is told in quite a cryptic way that required a few readings to really grasp it. A good attempt at the greek tragedy convention. Edwin is quite close to being a classical greek tragedy protagonist (arrogant, unknowing of his own arrogance, etc.) Only thing is the story is told in quite a cryptic way that required a few readings to really grasp it.

]]> Comment on People-Watch by theredpants http://yangguo.wordpress.com/people-watch/#comment-89 theredpants Wed, 06 Aug 2008 08:56:08 +0000 http://yangguo.wordpress.com/?page_id=15#comment-89 You have a lot of insights and opinions on the subjects but very little of the physicality of the characters - that's necessary if you're using these two as characters for your stories. You have a lot of insights and opinions on the subjects but very little of the physicality of the characters – that’s necessary if you’re using these two as characters for your stories.

]]> Comment on 50 Words Stories by theredpants http://yangguo.wordpress.com/50-words-stories/#comment-88 theredpants Wed, 06 Aug 2008 08:52:01 +0000 http://yangguo.wordpress.com/?page_id=12#comment-88 The subject matter of your stories are quite similar (violence and gore) but the real issue is that some of your stories are just telling of actions instead of actually carrying out these deeds (2 & 3). The subject matter of your stories are quite similar (violence and gore) but the real issue is that some of your stories are just telling of actions instead of actually carrying out these deeds (2 & 3).

]]> Comment on End of Life? by theredpants http://yangguo.wordpress.com/2008/08/02/end-of-life/#comment-87 theredpants Mon, 04 Aug 2008 09:34:27 +0000 http://yangguo.wordpress.com/?p=33#comment-87 Wee Kiat (and Michelle) - I couldn't agree more. Wee Kiat (and Michelle) – I couldn’t agree more.

]]> Comment on End of Life? by michelle http://yangguo.wordpress.com/2008/08/02/end-of-life/#comment-86 michelle Sun, 03 Aug 2008 15:08:03 +0000 http://yangguo.wordpress.com/?p=33#comment-86 hahaha. yea yea. 一个结束是另一个开始. lols! xD hahaha. yea yea.
一个结束是另一个开始.
lols! xD

]]> Comment on Dialogue by michelle http://yangguo.wordpress.com/dialogue-exercise/#comment-85 michelle Thu, 12 Jun 2008 13:53:57 +0000 http://yangguo.wordpress.com/dialogue-exercise/#comment-85 oh. by the way, i was laughing at "Then what about me? I slog day and night outside to support this family, to feed the kids, and to feed YOU! I merely forgot to call home and inform you, and you make such a big fuss out of it!" really sounds like PHUA chu kang lor. =x oh. by the way, i was laughing at “Then what about me? I slog day and night outside to support this family, to feed the kids, and to feed YOU! I merely forgot to call home and inform you, and you make such a big fuss out of it!”

really sounds like PHUA chu kang lor. =x

]]> Comment on Dialogue by michelle http://yangguo.wordpress.com/dialogue-exercise/#comment-84 michelle Thu, 12 Jun 2008 13:42:37 +0000 http://yangguo.wordpress.com/dialogue-exercise/#comment-84 oh my god! you are fast lah! hahaha. ****** and ***** voice right? lols! xD ***you were right, but because they dun want any credit to them, so i have to censor their name away. -Yang Guo- oh my god! you are fast lah! hahaha. ****** and ***** voice right? lols! xD

***you were right, but because they dun want any credit to them, so i have to censor their name away.
-Yang Guo-

]]> Comment on Meaning of Life… by winnie http://yangguo.wordpress.com/2008/06/01/meaning-of-life/#comment-83 winnie Mon, 02 Jun 2008 23:53:07 +0000 http://yangguo.wordpress.com/?p=28#comment-83 haiyo..the hello kitty craze..i still wonder wth they did it lor..maybe 'cos i wasn't a fan of hello kitties..so i cld nvr understand.. but i still remember long queues of people lining up outside the mcdonalds in amk.. haiyo..the hello kitty craze..i still wonder wth they did it lor..maybe ‘cos i wasn’t a fan of hello kitties..so i cld nvr understand..

but i still remember long queues of people lining up outside the mcdonalds in amk..

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